Task 14&15: Final Script and Storyboard Updated

 Updated Storyboard of the Dream Sequence:

We decided to entirely change the nightmare sequence from a kidnap scene to something more fitting, a nightmare about school. While filming, we filmed a few shots of books, lights and very stereotypical teenager's room. This make the film seem very Indie and the nightmare (the kidnap) didn't seem to suit/ link to some of the shots. For example, we had shots of maths books - this implies the character is intellectual. However, the kidnap scene didn't seem to link with our mise en scene. So, we scrapped that idea and decided to change the dream to a nightmare about plagiarism and failing. I believe this will work better because there is a consistent link between the dream and the mise en scene. I also believe that if done correctly, the dream will be super effective is there are quick shots and cuts. 

Script for the Nightmare:

Shot List

Task 19: Sound

The soundtrack we used for our old is called "Cinematic and Emotional Background Music"



We used this track because it builds up tension when combined with our footage. This track also has timed beats which is great for sudden jump cuts as they will be timed well with the music. We decided not to use any special sound effects because there is diegetic sound within the footage so we don't need to add any sound on top. However, in the end we decided this music was no good enough. It seemed slightly too tense and didn't seem to fit with what was happening in the footage. 

Task 18: Typography

Typography: 

Typography is a very important feature when showing text in a film. The text can convey the films genre swell as appealing to a target audience. The typography can also have hidden meaning such as the characters personality and characteristics.  Below are some of the fonts that Kieran found suited our film's sub-genre (horror) best.

As you can see, The fonts selected are curly to represent a childlike nature, bold to stand out and slightly distorted to imply our horror sub-genre.

After asking peers and questioning them about their favourite font, the selected font was Impact Label as shown above. I like this font as it looks like horror writing but it also looks curly and slightly childish, showing the main genre (coming of age.) 

What have I learnt? 

From this task I have learnt that typography is very important to our film. Since our sub-genre is horror, it would be too easy to show a distorted, destroyed font to convey horror. However, our main genre is coming-of-age and having a scary font would make audiences believe the film's main genre is horror instead of coming-of-age. 

Task 14&15: Final Script and Storyboard

Our script:

This is our final draft of the script. Kieran and I have had a problem with our narrative, scripting and storyboarding. This is because we believed tour first two ideas were not interesting enough or too much was crammed into the first two minutes. For example, the second script of Abducted was extremely detailed. However, the script waffled on and was too detailed. There was also a total of 3 flashbacks in the opening sequence. After talking it through with Kieran, we decided to completely change our idea again as too much was crammed into the opening sequence. 

New Storyboard: 

This is our new and improved story board. This time our storyboard have average shot times and music cues. Our storyboard is also pretty simple so it should be easier to follow. 

Task 17: Location, Props & Fashion

Task 16: Character Profile

 Character Profile: Olive

What Have I Learnt? 

From this task I have leant more about the main protagonist. Since only one character is shown in our opening sequence it makes in easier to focus on the one character. The character profile also allows us to accurately control how our actress acts as "Olive" as they are able to react accordingly to Olive's likes and dislikes.

Task 14&15: Script & Storyboard Updated

The New and Improved Storyboard:

New and Improved Script:

Task 14&15: Script and Storyboard

Our Script So Far:

What I like about our script: 

• I really like how our draft script is detailed at the moment. However, the detail varies meaning that it can easily be edited and worked around without deleting huge chunks or having to re-write a entire new script because it didn't match the chosen location. 
• I like how the text links to the action of a camera. It gives the impression that the protagonist is telling the story as it happens, despite the flashbacks being set in the past. 
• I like how short and simple the script it. A common misconception is the length of the script and the time it takes to record on the script. It all depends on the pace of the filming and the speech. It is better for the script to be short and have more added to it rather than it being too long and having to re-write bits so it will still fit the narrative. 

What I don't like about our script:

• Despite saying I prefer having a short script and adding to it, it could still be a potential problem while filming. For example, when we film the speak may only take up 30 seconds when it needs to be two minutes, and last minute improvisation leads to mistakes. However, I would prepare for this by rehearsing the script with the actor in a similar way to how they would speak it on the final voice recording. If the script is to short or too long, I can edit it down before filming in order to save any last minute panics. 
• I don't 100% like Olive's voice over. It sounds very dramatic and slightly unlike how a common teen would talk - however, she has suffered a traumatic experience. In order to fix this, I will have to ask peers what they think and talk to my partner, Kieran about how to fix her voice over.

Our Storyboard: 

What I think about the storyboard:

• I like the simplicity of the storyboard. It shows the locations and a few of the props. However, this simplicity would cause others to be confused as they will be unaware of our narrative. For example, here is my close friend reacting to the storyboard:  

• This storyboard is our first draft to establish the locations and how they would be viewed. It also makes it easier for Kieran and I to edit the storyboard in the future as we can add or take away from the storyboard.  It is obvious that we shall not be following this storyboard when we start to film. 

What Have I Learnt?

• From this, I have learnt that writing a script is hard. A script needs lots of detail so filming can go smoothly and too plan, but there can't bee too much detail just incase something needs to be reworked. I have also learnt that it is hard to assume how much film time a script will take up. Because of this, I will have to try several tests of the script to insure it takes up a reasonable amount of time. 

Task 13: Audience Profile

What Have I learnt?
From this task, I feel more certain about who my primary target audience is and how I can appeal to them. I have also learnt that picking an audience while having a Sub-Genre is difficult. This is because the main genre and sub-genre may not appeal to the same type of audience. For example, a romance film with huge amounts of violence and action (very unlikely.) The romance genre would appeal to women where as the action sub-genre appeals to men. This makes it slightly difficult to pin-point which gender would be the primary audience. But, that's where the secondary audience comes it. It allows you to target two social groups so you can appeal to them both. 

Our Film Idea: 3rd Strike (Scraped Idea)

Our Mind-Map:

Short Video of Our Idea: 
Old Idea from Charlotte Bancroft on Vimeo.